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Post by ant11181 Sat Mar 20, 2010 2:52 pm

Name:Kin-jea mainema /black diamond alchemist

Age Gender: male

Rank:Alchemist (works with homuculi)

Appearance: kin-jea mainema Archer-gar

Personality:He mostly quiet but easily aggravated.he rarely starts fight but when they acur hes ready for Battle .he doesn't converse with people a lot epically about his family. but when approach he happy for the most part .but his attitude of being relaxed and love of destruction confuses people .but he could care less about what other think .

History:He was born in to a family that mined diamond so he was moderately rich . around the age of twelve his farther left him with his mom and 5 sisters. soon after his mother and 4 sisters were sicken by the smog of the machines . later that year his mom and 4 of his sisters went missing and after a extensive search they were pronounced dead but kinjea didn't think so.so for that next couple of year he was still mining .and took up the practice of alchemy and figured out with his knowledge of alchemy he could have a better chance of finding his family. so he left his sister with a close family friend. while on his trip he realized he can u a diamond with a darkness seal he could amply his alchemy.


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Post by Sorazorachii Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:04 pm

Good. You filled out the form.
BUT.
Yu have major speling and grammar issues. I suggest that you train under either me or Wrath before role playing. However..... I could have sworn that you had to fill out an rp sample... *suspicion*
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Post by Wrath Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:05 pm

No. You don't. XD And I already told them to fix their grammar and that he's missing a sentence or two in personality.
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Post by Kyuuuuuuuuuu Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:30 pm

He's missing one sentence on Personality and four sentences on History. If I were you, I'd break up that VERY long run-on into more sentences in History.
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Post by Kyuuuuuuuuuu Sat Mar 20, 2010 8:05 pm

-sighed-

Approved.

-snaps fingers-

ENVY! WRATH! Escort the Alchemist to... The place... The place that is so secretive that no one knows where it is, except the Homunculi. owo
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